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Good
morning, Janice,
Because
your resume is being used for admission to a Graduate Program, I
condensed your material from a two-page into a one-page document. A
one-page resume is the industry standard.
After
carefully studying your academic and professional background, I chose a
“Student” resume to best display your qualifications to an
admissions director. A student resume is used when one has superior
academic achievements, but little to no work history.
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Example Critique:
Given
your music background, I further formatted your resume so that it would
look elegant. To that end, I placed your name flush left, increasing
its size until it stood out from the rest of the text.
I
placed your most important contact information (phone number &
email) above the line and your physical address below the line.
I
began your resume with a brief “Qualifications” section in
which I summarized and emphasized those qualifications I felt would
most interest an admissions director. To begin, I wrote of you as a
Graduate Candidate (since the resume is being used to secure admission
to a graduate school), then wrote of your solid academic background in
Music, including a Teacher’s License (this expresses your
dedication to academics).
Resume
Example Critique:
I
next wrote of your linguistic capabilities…”bilingual with
fluency in Japanese and English.” And then I wrote of your
volunteer history and your proven leadership skills as the president of
the Alumni for Women’s University-High School Alumni. Please
note: Due to space considerations, I was unable to add your membership
in the Catholic Church choir. I felt its inclusion did not warrant the
resume going to two pages.
Next,
I made mention of your solo performance with the University. This gives
an admissions director a good idea of your activities and musical
expertise. I then ended this section with your computer skills.
With
your outstanding academic record, I listed that section next (along
with Licensing and Honors), organizing the data so that all of the
courses you took at the Women’s University are listed under that
heading. Also, I put your schooling in reverse chronological order,
which meant that the HIGH Academy listing comes after the Women’s
University College of Continuing Education, rather than Georgetown
University as you had it.
Resume
Example Critique:
Next,
I listed your Professional Experience. Here, I began each bullet point
with the strongest action verb possible, while also rewriting the text
for clarity and conciseness.
For
example, you wrote:
“Filed
documents about CEO’s work and reports from staff.”
I
revised that to read:
“Update and maintain files.” (Because
you’re the CEO’s secretary it’s understood that it
would be his files you maintain.)
Resume Example Critique:
For
the next section, I chose to list your internships. These are far more
informative for an admissions director, than your volunteer experience.
Again,
due to space considerations, I was forced to condense your volunteer
experience. After reading the bullet points in your old resume, I
concluded that much of what you did as a volunteer was in an
administrative assistant / secretarial capacity that does little to
impress an admissions director. Better to condense this material than
to risk the resume going to two pages.
All decisions to modify or exclude data were in keeping with
the guidelines and standards set forth by the Professional Association
of Resume Writers (PARW).
With this resume, you now have a powerful tool that’s
well organized and filled with pertinent data, while also being
aesthetically pleasing.
It was a pleasure serving you, Janice.
Best of luck in all your future endeavors.
ResumeEdge Editor
Certified Professional Resume Writer (CPRW)
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